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      托福写作真题： 本文来自：英语之家

Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

托福写作范文：

Nowadays the food we eat is prepared fast and it really had an influence in our life. With all the aspects concerned, the change is considered to be negative.

As the time of the preparation is shortened, the nutrition in the food is reduced as well. Food producers do not focus on how much the protein and the vitamins should be contain, instead they just want to make the preparation shorter and shorter, which will be more efficient to satisfy the customers’ need, and this will help them to earn more money. Because of this reason, we can not obtain much nutrition from the food but only calories, and they do nothing to health.

Another aspect must not be ignored is that food plays an important role in our daily life. Sometimes we use food of various styles, tastes and colors to express our feelings just like musicians use tunes to express their passions. Fast preparation makes it impossible to show its advantage in art. All the food are the same taste, same style, and it makes the meal boring. Some people may even lose their appetite for meals as they are offered such a dull supper.

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As you can see, the fast food preparations have many disadvantages although we could not neglect that it supply enough time to those businessmen and businesswomen who are working hard everyday always have no time for meals. But to make a thoroughly thinking, fast food make people fail to take into account that food is also vital in our life and is certainly an art, it still has more negative impacts in our life.

托福作文点评1：

instead they just want to make the preparation shorter and shorter, which will be more efficient to satisfy the customers’ need;这一句跟主旨有抵触;能够去掉这句，只是说为了赚钱;

All the food are the same taste, same style;太片面了，觉得不太让人信赖，你可能重点举一两个例子说明味道不好，或者让人不胃口;

本文来自：英语之家

Some people may even lose their appetite for meals as they are offered such a dull supper. --这里的supper不能代替food;

总体上来说还是不错的，句型简洁，易懂，如果再论证方面多加修饰的话，成果会更好一些，加油!

托福作文点评2：

不知道你自己改了没有,第一句话就有时态的过错...判分一下就很不利 。

观点基本清楚,有论据,说服力苍白 。

作者用的句式对托福作文来说有25分把,然而句子内容累赘。

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